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@@ -52,7 +52,7 @@ flexable in the kinds of experiments that they can perform.  %
 This dissertation contains several projects undertaken to improve the reliability and accessibility

 of MR-CMDS.  %

 While MR-CMDS will never be a single-shot experiment, there are many improvements that can improve

-data collection speed.  %

+data collection speed.  % JCW- NOT SO SURE IT CAN'T BE SINGLE SHOT

 Necessary calibration, especially OPA calibration, can be made robust and fully automatic.  %

 Common artifacts can be addressed through relatively simple modifications in hardware and

 software.  %

@@ -64,11 +64,12 @@ frequency-domain coherent multidimensional spectroscopy.  %
 Due to its diversity and dimensionality, MR-CMDS data is challenging to process and represent.  %

 The data processing tools that a scientist develops to process one experiment may not work when she

 attempts to process an experiment where different experimental variables are explored.  %

-Historically, this has meant that MR-CMDS practitioners have used custom, one-off data processing

+Historically, this % JCW- "THIS" SHOULDN'T BE A NOUN STANDING ALONE AS THE SUBJECT OF THE SENTENCE

+has meant that MR-CMDS practitioners have used custom, one-off data processing

 workflows that need to be changed for each particular experiment.  %

 These changes take time to implement, and can become stumbling blocks or opportunities for

 error.  %

-Even worse, the challenge of designing a new processing workflow may make dissuade scientist from

+Even worse, the challenge of designing a new processing workflow may dissuade A scientist from

 creatively modifying their experimental strategy, or comparing their data with data taken from

 another group.  %

 This limit to creativity and flexibility defeats one of the main advantages of the MR-CMDS